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Review:gingersnape says:
Who can't wait for the party? Say aye? *jumps up and down* AYE! AYE! (captain! :P)

Alright, let's get started without heir preparations shall ew? This was a great chapter, not only because of the Marlene drama, but also just all of the getting ready and build up for the party! WOOP! :D

I'm glad most (notice not all... I wonder who...) of the girl's in Tina's dorm are noticing her now, as it's nice for her to get those little compliments on something that she's wearing or anything at all, just to see how far she's come. All I can think to say about the getting ready for the day is to be careful about the style of the time and just be careful to make sure it fits toe 70s. I don't really know too much about the fashions of the time, but I would recommend looking it up, as a good reference to have. :)

Now... let's dig up some dirt on one little problem. Guess who? I'll give you a hint! tarts with an "M" and ends with an "Arlene" :D What on earth is she doing draping herself all over Siriurs? I get that he likes someone who's a little more... physical shall we say, but we were so close with getting Sirius and Tina to admit they liked each other! Then I'm torn between wanting Marls to be with Sirius so Bella can't hurt Sirius, but then Tina's going to get hurt, and boy did you to a good job of leaving me clinging to every word because of the tossing and turning emotions welling up inside of me!

The getting ready for the party was nice, and I liked how you ended the chapter without eh ups and downs of being known thing from Tina! It really was the cherry on top of a well written chapter!

Spelling and Grammar: Same as usual with a few things off, but not too shabby overall.
Pacing and Flow: Really gripping when I read that Marlene was with (or rather on) Sirius and was great the rest of the chapter.
Overall, really...wait for it... Great! :)
See you in a bit,

Author's Response: Aha, I think the lack of sleep may be getting to you... but still loving the reviews ;P

Parttay, woop woop!

I never thought of the fashion stuff- I'll try and give it a look sometime! Thanks, that's a really great idea :)

Urgg, I know, I know, she is an absolute fool of a girl! Well, that is the dilema you see :) And I think the reason Sirius let her do this is because he's never really been this close to an actual meaningful relationship- and like the majority of men, he is scared by the idea :/ *pats self of back for welling emotions*

Aww, thanks, that's great stuff!

See you in a sec,
Lily :D

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