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Review:gingersnape says:
Hello again, it's gingersnape once more! (I have a feeling you could have guessed that from my name at the top of the review, but I still like to say my name because it makes the reviews look super important! Doesn't "gingersnape" sound like an important person's name? :P)

Let's dig into this with a three turns counter clockwise and a nice long chat about our Potions lesson today! Mmm, well wasn't this a steamy lesson in terms of relationship development between James and Lily and Tina and Sirius? They really at least turned the fire on so that there is room in the future for their love I know is hidden deep inside to burn! (I'm sticking with this Potions lesson metaphor, even if it is bad. :P)

Anyway, I liked how they made Lily have her usual little temper, though I did feel like James was not as bright as I thought he might be, considering he was an animagus and Head Boy, so I think he might be at least a bit better at Potions. However, all of his lines were funny, so I'd say you're fairly okay keeping him where he is.

The Sirius/Tina chit chatting was great! Hehe, I blushed for Tina when she blushed as they mentioned dreams. :) And the "girls are weird" line made me laugh as soon as I read it. Hehe, they really have the best conversations!

The plan especially was a really nice way to tie in that Tina isn't oblivious to what Sirius was trying to do, and I did have to keep my "Awww" ing down as it's now just past two am. :P

Spelling and Grammar: Same as usual. There was the odd "me" instead of "I" and misplaced comma, but it was really pretty good!
Pacing and Flow: Just the right speed to keep the chapter a wonderful read!
Overall, yet another great chapter, and you should be able to look up and see me again pretty soon! :)
-ginger

Author's Response: Hello, hello, hello, Gingersnape does sound like a very important persons name indeed *curtsies*

Well, wow, what a wonderfully metaphor filled para. I'm guessing it's trying to say something good- so thanks! ;P

Maybe I made him a bit too dumb- but I think it's also the effect being around Lily has on him :) And he is a vair vair funny young gent!

I'm glad you like their convos! I like writing them and think they are pretty gosh darn cute if I may say so myself! :D

Aha, wow, thanks for staying up so late to review this! I appreciate it muchly!

*looks up* I see you! I see you!

Lily :)


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