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Review:gingersnape says:
Oooh, wasn't this a great chapter, though my heart ached for poor Tina in the ending when she came back to her realization about what was to come.

You really can tell a lot about a woman from what her make up counter looks like. (Mine is mostly covered with earrings. Everywhere. A very small portion of it is actually holding makeup. I think it fits my personality. :D) Lily's also seemed to fit her and it was a nice description you had of her neat and tidy organizational skills that had to be in the right order. It just summer her up very well.

Speaking of great ways of showing characters, the little playful fight James and Sirius had was my favorite part of the chapter. It definitly captured their cute brotherly relationship and was a wonderful way of making both me, and probably Tina, feel closer to the bys because we were sort of "in" on the little ruffles the rest of the world doesn't get to see when they think of the Marauders.

The ending of the chapter was really chilling because most of the chapter was happy, but as I said before, my heart really did fall for Tina when I remembered all of the stress the poor girl must be under.

Spelling and Grammar: Pretty good for the most part. :)
Pacing and Flow: Lovely, just the right sped.
Overall opinion: Another great chapter!

And I'll be right above this review in a minute! :)
-ginger

Author's Response: Heyy,

Makeup is vair vair vair important in a woman's life- I'm glad someone else appreciates that! I didn't want to go into too much detail in case I allienate half my readers ;) maybe I'll do a special chappie just for the girls describing everyone's makeup counters (Bella's would be interesting, don't you think :P)

Aww, I love love love 'em! They are just so gosh darn cute with their little play fights. Yeahh, I wanted to show that Tina was getting closer to them :D I didn't want to get too fluffy but I do love their little play fights...

Mwahahaha, you have been struck by the Pathos bunny! I got cha! Hehe :P

Thanks for another great review!

Lily :)



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