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Review:gingersnape says:
Hello again dearie! (Great chapter image by the way! It fits perfectly with the chapter and really looks great! :D)

Mmm, mmm, mmm, is Bella insane or what? When I first read this chapter and reread it a million times in disbelief of her evilness, I was just really drawn in by how you showed Bella's character as going beyond creepy and into like... creepier? o.O I am descriptionless. There is not a single word in any of my thesauri that can describe Bella, and having thumbed through these beloved books daily, I can tell you there are a lot of words hidden in those pages!

And then the third person bit was really amazing because I felt like it was a geat addition to the chapter in that the way it wad written complimented the Bella scene perfectly. Remus' reaction the the events that had happened earlier were in character and other than how his dialogue did feel a little forced, I'd say it was a good section.

Hmm, I can't think of much more to say because the rest of the chapter went swimmingly and I didn't see anywhere to give CC on them. In answer to your question about the POV switches, I'd say that I like how they all compliment each other nicely and really bring out the differences in each chapter as well as bring more than just Tina into the story. I like them and hope to see more of them as I solider on throughout the night! :)

See you in a few minutes,
-ginger

Author's Response: Hello! Well, you have the lovely talented people at TDA to thank for that! :D

Aha, she is a creepy deeky character! I don't want to overdo it but I also get kind of carried away when I'm writing her and also want to show that she was completely evil- even when she was in school!

Thanks, glad you liked it!

That's all good! I like writing from different POVs so I'll try and keep doing that :)

Lily

ps- the normal layout seems to be fading... where is spelling and gramming? where is pace and flow?? Nahh, I joke, I joke, I still loves your reviews muchly :DD


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