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Review:blueirony says:
Whoa. I had to let out a breath after reading that. That was intense. But a really good intense.

I'm not sure what the challenge was about. I'm assuming from the title that it involved writing about a dark character and turning the reader's sympathy toward them. Did you achieve this? I'm not sure you did. Now before you get disheartened, let me explain. Beyond sympathy, I think that what you did was expose the true Antonin. And being able to do that is far beyond evoking any amount of sympathy in my eyes. Of course, that is just my opinion. But I really did think you did an amazing job with him.

Characterisation. Spot-on. Which is weird. I don't really know Antonin as a character. In the books, he was just another Death Eater. Nothing more. You changed that. You made me realise that he is a person. He has fears and dreams and wants just like anyone else. That is really amazing writing.

There was also something about the overall feel of this. It was like I could see it in my mind's eye. I could imagine how he would be lying in bed, tortured by his own mind and trying desperately to find a way to forget but failing. I have this image in my head and it's... I don't know. There is something about the dead of the night. The world is so still. And if you're ever awake at the time, there really isn't much else to do but think. And it's not like thinking at any other time of the day. It's you. And the rest of the world. And you get this... feeling. I got that feeling while reading this. I can't really explain it in words. But just know that you did a phenomenal job with the setting. Phenomenal.

I also loved the flashbacks. They flowed well (though I think you could do without the "..." before they start, I think that type of sign-posting is a little bit too obvious and detracts the reader's attention from the story) and you broke them up really well, too. It was like each part of the flashback came with its own cliffhanger. Yet, they flowed really well from each other. And they also worked really well with the present day prose. Really clever.

I also loved the idea of this. The insomnia aspect of it. It sets a mood from the start and the idea of the story worked well with the title, the character, the setting, the flow and the overall feel.

Overall a really nice one-shot and a lovely insight into a character that is perhaps overlooked a lot in fanfiction.

Well done.

Joop.

Author's Response: Wow. Your review... it's just left me speechless. I really can't tell you how much that meant to me... Truly.

Thank you so much, you totally got everything I was striving for with this piece. You're one of the only people I felt saw what I was actually writing about, and I can't thank you enough for that.

Thank you so much... I just can't say it enough. ^^


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