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Review:NeverGotHerLetter says:
Hi! You asked for a review on my thread, and so here it is! :D
So, this story was a nice change from the usual Sirius stuff.
I liked the plot development when you mentioned about the marauders becoming animagi, and I liked that you got Sirius to be the one in love rather than the girl, Kristi.
I think that in some parts it was a little cliche, like Lily's reaction, and Sirius being "the one and only" but I think these cliches added to the story somehow, and it made it really lovely.
I liked the sudden change at the end, when we found out about Kristi's feelings. I think that it was really painful for Sirius, and you portrayed that well. Also you gave a reason for Sirius never getting married or having kids, so that was really nice to see you had thought about that.
Characterisation was great, I know he was a minor character, but I really liked Remus'. He was quiet but still part of the group, and you showed he didn't want the marauders to become animaguses which he definitely didn't. The main characters were also very good.
Wow! You're first ever one shot? Well for that, it's brilliant, you should definitely write more :)
Great job - 8/10.
~NeverGotHerLetter x x x x x x

Author's Response: Hello! I'm really glad that you think this is different then what is usual for Sirius as I was kinda hoping to make it that way although I have never read anything about just Sirius so I had no idea if I did or not. Also I'm glad you liked the plot line and that I didnt just focus on Sirius and Kristi but that I also added in the guys as well. I know some things were cliche but I'm glad that you think it added to the story rather then detract from it. I'm glad that it was a sudden change at the end for you because i was hoping that people really wouldnt predict that this was going to happen to him. I'm also really happy that you think i did a great job on characterization not just for the main characters but for Remus as well.

Yes this was my first ever oneshot and I do plan on writing more. I actually have about 20 some that I have to write because I'm doing Just For You oneshots to celebrate the 10th anniversary of this site and had about 20 people sign up for it. Thank you for reading and reviewing!

~Slytherinchica08~

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