You asked for a review last sunday, and so here it is!
So I'm really impressed with this!! It's seriously amazing! I'm going to read Red Hair and a Beater's Bat to catch up to date :)
So I'll start with your areas of concern that you posted in my thread, and then I'll ramble as per usual :)
SO the first area of concern was characterisation.
I really liked your characterisation! I got a good idea of Athena's character, that she was humble and didn't care about her looks but also fierce and intelligent in the order meeting. I also liked your characterisation of Artemis, as she seems so much different from her sister, which is usually the case in real life, which make it realistic.
Next is believability! I liked that you made the family so involved in the Order and it makes a really good plot invention, but I don't think that you should include (if any of the Weasleys) Ron and Hermione, as they actually weren't allowed in the meetings, like in the fifth HP Book, Order of the Phoenix. I think it's ok to let the of-age Weasley's in though. Although I suppose, as Athena is going in to her seventh year, she would only be sixteen and her not being in the meetings would take away the whole plot... I don't know, just think about it and then do whatever you'd like :)
So I really like the ideas you have, and I like the names for the two sister's boyfriends. I think they're imaginative and unique enough to belong in the wizarding world which is great, and adds to the believability of the story, so well done.
So, I always do three reviews per novel (except for one shots of course) and so if you repost on my thread once the next two chapters are up, then I'd be happy to do reviews for those two, if you want me to. :)
You're right to be proud of this and I look forward to seeing Athena's point of view of the rest of the story :)
~NeverGotHerLetter x x x x x x
Author's Response: Hey, thanks so much for the review! In response to your points about the younger students in the Order, remember Harry was actually the last of his friends to turn 17, Ron and Hermione are both quite a bit older and are already 17, turning 18 during their 7th year. The same goes for Athena. I actually wrote the backstory for her sixth year (though I'm not posting it because it's a lot of irrelevant detail) but she turned 17 in the September of her 6th year (similar age to Hermione) and joined the Order officially on the same day.
I'm so glad the characterisation of Athena worked, she's exactly as you described her and I'm glad that's coming across, particularly in the first chapter. As you also picked up on, Artemis is very different to Athena, and once again I'm super relieved that I've characterised them in a way that others can see them the way I do...I have struggled with that in the past. Thanks also for the comment about the names :) I love having fun with names, particularly ones from the classical world, and it's good to know they fit the setting of the story and add to its believability. Thanks for the offer for more reviews, I may take you up on that when the next chapters are up :) Once again, thank you so much for the review!