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Review:Violet Gryfindor says:
Now you have me worried.

Rose is diabolical, too. She's creepy! She's mysterious! She's unlike any other characterization of Rose that I've ever seen. My skin is crawling with this chapter because of the way that she's elected herself to be judge and jury against Clara. It feels like such a gross revenge when she doesn't even know all the facts (or she's being clever and keeping them from the readers for some very important reason - she's a wonderful example of the unreliable narrator, something I've always wanted to try), as though she's trying to get Clara back for something more than the sororicide. There's something that she's not telling.

I was equally frightened upon hearing Clara's outburst about the essay. It was filled with double meanings that only her and Rose understood - it's like she was telling Rose that she couldn't have possibly murdered her sister, that Rose doesn't know the full story and never can/will.

Oh my gosh this story is so complex! How do you keep up with it all while writing it? I never could keep all the threads in line like you are, Gubby. It's an amazing story and I'll be on the lookout for updates whenever you have the time. It's definitely the best WIP around. ^_^

Author's Response: Rose was always diabolical and creepy and mysterious -- at least Narrator Rose was. The past two chapters, being flashbacks, feature a Rose who doesn't know what she's getting into, but wants to find out. Now we switch into "present time," you could say, and the extent of her craziness becomes more and more apparent. She's such an unreliable narrator, you're correct, and her revenge is gross. She doesn't know all the details, but she knows most of them; she doesn't tell her audience because she admits (maybe not here, but in a later chapter) that she has a flair for the dramatic. She wants Clara to fall in the greatest way possible. She admires the monologue-before-elaborate-scheme trope. What her true motivations are in her crusade against Clara remains to be seen.

The essay outburst was actually hard to write, because how do you hide such threatening phrases in a conversation that can be mistaken for the commonplace? But I'm glad it worked. But what she's saying is not that she didn't kill her sister -- she admitted as much in the first chapter -- but that Rose doesn't understand what she, Clara, has done, or what she, Rose, might wreak if she goes on with this. Of course, Rose's response is to write her off, so... hmm. Intrigue.

The problem isn't that I can't keep up with it -- the few threads I am aware of aren't that bad -- but that I can't WRITE it. Rose's voice is ridiculous. It takes a lot to do it without making her sound repetitive. But... eek eek eek. Best WIP around? I beg very much to differ. But, you know, thank you so much. Now I know that I should update every now and again, just to make you happy (this seems to be a theme with the seldom-updated darkfics, no?). THANK YOU.

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