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Review:Aderyn says:
Hi! I'm here for your review- sorry for the wait!

I like the concept of this story. Telling about 3 generations really brings the oneshot together. I think you did a good job with distinctive voices, but still managed to make the whole thing cohesive. I like how all of the Potters changed for their wives/girlfriends.

I also like how none of these stories had a fairy tale sort of ending. I know this fits well with the song (which, I forgot to say, applies very well to all of these situations) but some writers would have had things end with a kiss or a proposal or something like that. Even if in the HP books, James and Lily and Harry and Ginny end up together, it's not as idealized in your story, which I like. Realistic relationships can be hard to find in fan fiction.

Your spelling and grammar looks good to me. The one thing I did notice though, was spacing. You have a lot of extra, un-needed lines between your paragraphs. While this has nothing to do with your writing, it can be a bit distracting.

Overall, I like this one shot. I think that you could try to smooth the transitions out a little but overall, you did a nice job.

Author's Response: Hi! Thanks so much for this!

Really glad you liked this, and that the voices came accross to you. Realistic relationships are very important to my writing, that's what JK Rowling always writes aboout, so in a way who are we to argue? :)

The spacing is irritating, I'll sort that out once I get rid of my backlog of stuff to upload!

Thanks again for the review, really appreciate it!


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