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Review:Dalek194 says:
Very nicely done! Dispite the constant feel of sadness and gloom it is compelling to read. You are an excellent writer, though sometimes Lily's thoughts about one being the other can get a little confusing.

Working in reverse chronology makes the story more interesting, and also gives it a unique vibe. Though the story requires a lot of concentration and a few re-reads to be fully understood, this just proves the depth and detail that your writing goes into. Great work, well done!

Author's Response: It's very gloomy, isn't it? That's what I don't like about the finished product, probably because it wasn't what I wanted to write in the first place and I don't know how or why it came out that way. Lily's thoughts are, to a degree, meant to be confusing because she can't keep Snape and James straight in her head all the time, but I was worried while writing that the syntax for those sections wasn't coming out right, so I'll check back and hopefully can make some revisions. :)

I'm very glad to hear that the reverse chronology worked. I've been trying to find the right storyline for this type of structure, a story that has to make more sense backwards than forward, and it's great to know that using it here adds to the story. :D It definitely makes it harder to read, especially with all the added layers of repeated symbols, etc., but I appreciate that you took the time to read it through and, even more so, that you enjoyed it.

Thank you! ^_^

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