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Review:LadyMalfoy23 says:
Ohhh, sorry it took me so long to get around to your review hun!! This was amazing! I am so glad you finished it the ending was not at all how i expected it to be even though you told me that was what was going to happen. This was a great piece for your first work.

I love how you balanced the ratio of details and dialog perfectly for one shots and it was such a jumble of everything that we know about the marauders. This was my first marauders and it makes me want to go out and read more.

Characterization was amazing, i love how you wrote sirius, and i love how you explained his whole player status that everyone sees him as being! Is nerves seem so normal and add real depth into the story, Remus and James were spot on, how they were about their "Problems", its exactly how i pictured them to be!! More importantly i do however LOVE that you added in Peter!! Not many marauders writers do so this made me smile (even though i dont particularly like him myself)

Plot line was great and to the point with perfect details that added a great depth into the story, I really enjoyed this read! Cant wait to read more!!

Xx Jess

Author's Response: hey hun! dont worry about how long it took you to review real life doesnt hold off for anyone. I'm glad that the ending wasnt how you expected it even though you knew what was going to happen, its nice to know that i did manage to do that part. I'm also really glad you think i did a good job of balancing dialouge and the details and that this made you want to read more marauders fanfics. I'm glad you thought my characterization is good and that you think him being nervous brought depth to the oneshot. I think that Sirius probably did worry about things but that he didnt really let people see that much.

Thank you for taking the time to read and review my oneshot! Thank you so much hun!

~Slytherinchica08~


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