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Review:Aderyn says:
This is... insane. Really. The whole concept is crazy but brilliant. And you pulled it off so wonderfully. I had to read it about a million times to understand it, and I'm still not sure that I get all of it (but that's probably the point).

Really, I don't know all what to say to you. I am speechless in shock. Your language here is superb. This is almost like a very lyrical sort of poem. " She is an ode to lesser gods. You are the lyrics sung by battered angels. " This line is so beautiful, probably one of my favorites. I also love the " Victory, Victory " part- so fitting!

Strangely, this story reminds me a bit of the Great Gatsby - with one Victoire as Daisy, the other as Gatsby and the husband as Tom. I have no idea if you'e read it or not, so I won't say anything that might spoil the book, but the part about having " eyes like money " reminds me a lot of the Great Gatsby, where Daisy has a " voice like money. " Also, the part where one is trying to get the other to leave her husband seemed familiar. I'm by NO means saying you plagiarized this. I just happened to have finished the book and saw a couple of similarities.

As for which Victoire...I'm not quite sure...I guess I'm leaning towards Victoire Bertram for one reason. In the end, the papers are for "Victoire Weasley" and I'm assuming that if she was/had been married, her last name would have changed (to Lupin or whatever). So because of that I say it's Victoire B. However, I only that that bit through after reading it several times. The first time I sort of assumed it was Victoire W and Teddy.

Seriously, I am in awe of your writing skills. I have no more words to describe how wonderful this work of art is.

Author's Response: Ah, insane is a good word for it in hindsight. It's a very small and very big one-shot at the same time; it's obscure, chaotic and abrupt, but I honestly hoped it would be like that. I wanted something that couldn't be read or understood in one read.

I actually have read "The Great Gatsby" and didn't write this story with any kind of intentional parallels to it. But I do adore Gatsby, Daisy (not so much Tom, haha) and F. Scott Fitzgerald. The leaving your spouse theme is quite familiar in writing, especially if one person is having an extramarital affair. But I am very flattered by the comparison! :)

Well, that is a good point, but if the second person narrator had been Victoire Weasley, after Teddy's death, she may have chosen to return to the last name of Weasley. Either way, if the second person narrator was Victoire Weasley, putting Lupin as her last name would have been as good as identifying her! For all we know, she may have married another man and Teddy could've been Victoire Bertrand's husband! I was trying to go for the obscurity again. :P

Thank you so much, Aderyn! For the review and also for the constant support! :)

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