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Review:Coley says:
Hola de nuevo a mi amigo. Ahora, en la segunda parte de su regalo. I knew spanish class would come in handy at some point of my life. :)

Well you can definitely see an improvement in the quality of your writing, the plot and the characters really intrigued me. I can see a lot of your personal style now as well, your style really does suit your style of writing. It was really refreshing to see an emotional and caring Sirius rather than the stereotypical fanfiction persona that he has that is somewhat unrealistic considering the nature of the books.

However, I would liked to have seen more grief and devastation over the death of her family, it seemed as if you just brushed that aside and focued more on her own safety. I would have liked to have seen more development of how she reacted towards the deaths.

I really liked the bittersweet moment of the kiss, it was sweet and sad and really gave you a feel as to how much the characters really did like each other. As I previously stated, the characterisation of Sirius was very different from what you usually see in fanfiction and I really enjoyed that aspect.

Overall, the piece flowed beautifully and it was well written, it was really nice to see the development of your personal style and how you make the piece your own. :D - another cheeser!

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