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Review:TheProphecy says:
Hellooo!

Reviewing from the forums :)

I liked this story very much. At the very beginning I thought you had Sirius true to character but as it went on Sirius seemed a bit serious *Giggles at pun*, the same with James when they are talking about becoming an animagus, I felt although they would've wanted to help Remus and that would be their main motivation I wanted to see the reckless side a bit more. I felt they were too solemn and dull for my liking.

I loved Sirius's nervous inner thoughts, I felt you wrote them very well and realistically.

I liked how Lily and james had their conflict, though I felt you could've made that general part a little more original and less predictable. But it was good :)

I loved that rejection bit, it is not often I see such a brilliant rejection and it was a nice twist to have the girl reject the I love you rather then Sirius.

I thought this was a really good idea as to why Sirius became the play-boy we know and love, it's always something I have been curious about and it was nice to see your ideas :D

The only point I will mention was that It wasn't very clear where the flash back was. Just a point, I got a little bit confused.

But other then that I really enjoyed this. Well done.

Hannah x (8/10)

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm really glad that you liked this even though i did have sirius and them a little more serious about the conversation i was kinda thinking it would be nice to see that side of them because i'm sure they had many serious conversations where they didnt joke around about things. I know that the part with james and lily was a little predictable but i think a good majority of their relationship was predictable until they started to get along thats where things (atleast in my opinion) get a little more unpredictable.

I'm glad you liked the rejection part of the story and that it was a good idea for why he becomes a play-boy in the future. Someone else told me that they had a hard time realizing when the flashback started as well so i will deffinately make sure when i edit this that i do something so people know that its a flashback.

Thank you for your time and for reading and reviewing. It means a lot to me!

~Slytherinchica08~

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