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Review:orderofthephoenix says:
Hey! I'm here with your review :)

I've reviewed your first chapter, but if you want me to review a specific chapter, feel free to request again and let me know :)

Onto the review: That was amazing!! As an OC, you've introduced Drew very well. She's got an interesting personality and a brilliant attitude :) She seems able to cope with being part of James' massive family and often being embarassed.

The psycho ex-girlfriend looks like a force to be reckoned with :P and I suppose Drew's got to have a certain amount of humour to deal with her and the wannabe girlfriends.

The flow of the story was also good. Although a little tricky to understand at times, I liked how you started the story with action, (Drew falling over in the corridor), before introducing herself and James.

I do have one criticism though. Toni and Kieran seem to be too perfect. As James' friends, I would expect them to be fairly good looking and everytihng, but at the moment they are Mary-Sues. You may have already planned this, but if not, I'd suggest finding them some sort of a flaw.

Apart from that, a great start and I really enjoyed reading this! :D

-Sophia

Author's Response: Hi, thanks so much for reading and reviewing. I am going to make sure I find the time to go through the chapter again to make sure it is easier to understand, Don't worry their flaws will come out soon, it is just how Drew sees them at the moment. Thanks again for the review. I have made sure to take everything you said on board =D!!

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