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Review:Alopex says:
I don't know if you've ever come across me saying this or not, but flashbacks are one of my least favorite literary devices in fanfiction. I'm always skeptical of them because I often feel that they are just randomly tacked on to a chapter. I'm putting the flashbacks in this chapter in the middle of the road by my standards: not just randomly tacked on, but not the best I've ever read either. (Coming from me, this is a compliment regarding flashbacks.)

Right off the bat, I don't see a better way for you to have included Remus's memories, especially since this is a one-shot. It's often difficult to include deep or complicated backstory in a one-shot . . . there's all this stuff to say sometimes, that is actually relevant and important, but that isn't the story itself, if that makes sense.

I have to say I was shocked at Remus's memory about the unnamed woman! How awful! No wonder he was traumatized. Honestly, the whole thing disgusts me a little, but that's the point, isn't it? That Remus is also completely disgusted and horrified with himself. It does seem like an extreme way to explain his worry and aversion to relationships, but at the same time, I do admire it when writers don't shy away from the more wolfish aspects of Remus's character. He IS a werewolf, after all.

By the way, I really like that quote you included about not needing a better thing.

Author's Response: Hi Alopex! :D

Gah, sorry for the late responses! I've been replying to them rather sporadically, but I hope to finish the last two tomorrow hopefully!

Hehe I haven't come across you saying that before, but I've now learnt something new about you ;) Hey, thanks for saying that at least mine aren't tacked on :P I really appreciate your honest feedback!

Yeah.. it is a bit disgusting.. it was kind of a spur of the moment plot from the quotes I was given from two of the challenges and a banner from the 3rd.

So yeah, thank you for the nice review! :) And your honesty as well :)
-charlotte :)

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