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Review:WitnesstoitAll says:
Here for your offered review exchange!!

This was incredibly sweet. I loved the brief portrait of Ted and Dromeda's relationship that you displayed here. The double life that she lived in the presence of her sister. The tenderness that Ted had. All so beautiful. I love that she eventually gave up her family for that.

I was a little uncertain about the *6 months later* bit. I feel like your writing is so pretty and smooth that the little chronological insert was a little jarring. Perhaps a simple page break, or ~::~ demarcation would allow your story to continue on it's delicate and beautiful course. But even this was a minor critique.

All in all, this was a fabulous story. I would love to read more about this version of Ted and Andromeda that you have created. And that's the sign of a good one shot, offering enough to tell the story, but not enough to answer all the readers questions.

Wonderful!
xx
Melissa

Author's Response: Thank you so much. :)

Wasn't too fond of the 6 months thing myself. Never considered a page break though. I guess it just didn't occur to me. Lol.

Again, think you sooo much! --Jenna


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