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Review:LovelyMioneWeasley says:
Hello there,

This was an interesting second chapter to read. I thought you did a pretty solid job of establishing good relations in this chapter.

The beginning was solid with the early morning start before heading to King's Station and all of its teasings between the siblings. I also liked that their mom tends to pick on Hiba more. I think that that is very believable especially with the Arab culture.

Her Baba is very sweet and endearing especially to read about in his concern for his children. Ali better not get more detentions; though, at 15, I doubt that it will not happen.

Your flow worked well for this story and I think you introduced Jill and Remus into the story before well. I loved that you had Remus giving the chocolate to her; it was very PoA but I did love it.

I also thought that Jill was a believable best friend for Hiba (Hibs) to have! I am glad that you made her seem very typical girl though. All the accusations and theories that she spewed out were fun to read about.

Overall, I thought you did a good job with this chapter. You got a little wordy in some areas but I didn't spot any typos in this chapter.

LMW

Author's Response: Again, thank you so much for this amazingly wonderful review! Very helpful again! :)
And I'm telling you now that watch out for my future requests, because I'll be stalking you for more!! :P
Thanks! :)


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