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Review:kaileena_sands says:
Awww, is this the end? I would like to know how this continues!

Anyways, thank you for entering my challenge! I like the story you've written quite a lot.

I think the strongest point of it is your writing style. You really use language beautifully which makes your descriptions of both atmosphere and emotions very powerful. I also like your characterisations of Percy's daughters - I think it's quite possible that they are brought up in such a stern posh way that he deems correct. Your introduction of your OC Darren is also well-executed. In the beginning, we get just a bit about him and he even seems a bit like a fishy character. Later, though, we discover that it is Molly's own uptight and ambitious self that had put an end to their relationship. I also like how despite her apparent strong ambition, she is also kind of vulnerable inside, as illustrated by her inability to tell him about the baby.

As for the quote - I like its placement! I certainly can imagine Lucy saying a thing like this! Thanks for writing such a great thing!

Best,
Harley

Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing!

Yes, this is the end, I wanted it to be ambiguous.

I'm glad that you like both the writing style and the quote placement.

And thank you for posting such an inspiring challenge!


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