Firstly, the ending here is really clever, and you had me thinking it would be Luna for a while, so that was a refreshing surprise! :) I like the idea of Rolf, and I like the way that you portrayed him here, too. (Lee Pace is a good face I think!)
Iíd always tried to placate my own tastes by putting him closer to Luna in age, but I really like that Tonks is his friend here. I like Tonks, and think that her friendly, clumsy self is often unrepresented in stories about her and Remus :)
I think itís charming; the whole thing, and the little details, like Rolf is the one that the owner calls when she gets in a new specimen, and that in the end, he decides that itís over, and it doesnít turn into something that youíd expect. I think that the song really works with this story: I donít like song-fics that tell exactly the same story as the song, using the same imagery and everything. I think that this does a good job with keeping the actual message or point the same but doing it in a creative way. :)
I love the name that he chose for the little lizard, too. Itís clever and it sounds cute, like a pet would have it. You have a really extensive vocabulary, thatís clear, from reading through your stories I can see that. You just put words to good use; there arenít too many that it looks like you just stuck there because youíre supposed to. It all looks on-purpose, and itís very economical, not to reduce words to such things, but still :) Saying a lot, with a few letters, is hard. And you do it exceptionally well.
I like that this is a sort of unusual conglomeration of things, too. Pet store, meeting an old friend, work place... but the whole thing is hinged upon a breaking romance. It was nice, unusual. I like this one a lot :)
(pirouetting at this point)
Author's Response: I believe I was trying to mold it into a Rolf/Luna for awhile, then gave up. I have no clue why. :P But either way, it was a refreshing change for me. This banner is one of many that I snagged from the UFG section at TDA; so many people rely on banners, but there's no need to request one when there are so many great ones up for grabs.
Tonks is actually very close to the trio/Ginny/Luna in age; I think she was in Charlie Weasley's year in canon, which isn't really that old. Considering Rolf never made an appearance in the books, and I didn't want to make him international, I just plopped him in Tonks' year. You know, for someone reason, I now have an odd desire to write Tonks/Remus. . . be right back. . . :P
It's definitely fun to write a story that follows a song, but it's dull for the reader. I don't know how I came up with this song (it's track 9 or 10 in an album where only the first 6 are really worth listening to), but I tried to mold Rolf's story to it a little less closely. I agree entirely that that makes for a better read.
Really, I have a good vocabulary? Well, that's nice to hear! I don't use thesauruses much, which I hear is a good thing. Even when I use them, through antonyms of synonyms of antonyms I usually end up finding a funky word I file away for a later date, and give up on my current word. :P
It's definitely shaky on plot, mostly because it was so hard to arrange the story around the song AND where I wanted it to go AND try and keep it organized. Nice to know it all straightens out by the end.
Thank you once more!!! And you think you're pirouetting? What am I doing, as the recipient, then? Performing entire ballets?!