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Review:Aiedail says:
Firstly I would just like to comment on your ability to choose apt titles. I really believe that a good title adds beauty and fulfillment to a story, and this one doesn’t disappoint.

For the entire length of time that I was reading, it was very easy for me to see what was happening. The way that you paint pictures into your story is so fresh that I wouldn’t actually have a hard time believing you if you told me you were classically trained. I wouldn’t say that I’m an artist myself, but I have a very visual eye, if you will, so I really enjoy your vivid and eloquent imagery. Particularly striking to me is the way that you connect Bellatrix to the icy limbs of the leafless trees through her hair, and Andromeda to the summer through Sirius’s memory.

I like the way that Sirius looks at things. He notices without true understanding the look in Rodolphus’s eye in the second before he completely destroys the snowman, and though I’m not sure how old he must be, this fits the mind of a young boy to a tee. As always, you seem to really capture different characters here, and I like the liberal use of the word “love” and the way you make us pick the different ways in which it’s used. Perhaps this particular way of releasing information is coincidental, but I find it rather nice.

Above all this story retains credibility. It isn’t overtly dramatic, but this is a tense moment, and I feel it strongly.

Phew! I think that anything else I say here in praise is pretty much running it into the ground...lovely, lovely story!

Happy day of love ;)

--lily

Author's Response: Gah, I feel like I'm absolutely terrible at titles! Unless I think of the title right along with the idea (Undeniable is the only one I can think of off the top of my head), I kill myself over them once I've finished writing. I like simplicity, sure, but squeezing everything I have to say into a few words is stretching it a bit too far. This one in particular I'm still unsure of. Good to know you liked it, at least!

I'm not positive, but I think as I was writing this I told myself to edge outside of my comfort zone a bit. I think I was also reading a really descriptive book at the time, and that sort of thing always influences me. But either way I'm not a really descriptive person, and I still managed to produce something I'm proud of. I think I also like it because Bellatrix is my absolute favorite character, and I rarely write her because she's so. . . complete in my mind.

I tried to make Sirius the typical young kid that notices much, but doesn't have the background yet to understand what he's seeing. So events make their way through his thoughts but don't entirely register.

Again, thank you for such a charming review! These are making my day all over again!


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