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Review:Miss Writer says:
Hi Charlotte! I'm here with your review. I wasn't confused but I wasn't sure if I had properly understood it, with the unnamed OC. I did. :)
So I thought this was a great story and really cleverly constructed. I loved the memories too.
I loved the use of ambiguity, keeping the OC unnamed, as if Remus couldn't think of her name because it was too painful.
It got to the point and it was a really nice read.
I thought you had perfectly characterised. Tonks and Remus felt extremely real and Remus' emotions were in great depth which JKR didn't go into so much.

My one piece of advice (which is barely something useful) is if you wanted to, you could have more description to introduce the setting and his feelings when he realised he had killed his love. And at the same time, I'm not sure whether it is completely to character how Remus forgets about the full moon. He was always quite a careful character.

That's not important though because it is the only way for Remus to kill her without it getting extremely unbelievable.

Overall, this is a fantastic story and I loved the snippets of memories and the lovely writing. It is great. :)

Claudia x

Author's Response: Hello Claudia! ^_^

Lol I'm glad you understood it! And thanks for the compliments :)

Ooh; yes, I suppose I could add in a bit more description, another thing I"m not too great at. And well, Remus forgetting the moon is something everyone has been reviewing about :P I can't really think of any ideas.. ooh I should start a Help Needed topic - you know what? I think I'm going to do that! The one idea I have is rather weird :L

On their honeymoon, they first went to the American Samoa, then, to Australia. (These two place's time zones are 24 hours apart, and so they forget that, and Remus thought the next night was the moon, but it was actually this night, because of the 24 hour time zone difference, and how that means they miss one whole day. Uhh…. yeah.. Not a lot of sense right? :P And it's rather ridiculous :L

ANYWAY…, thank you!! :D Glad you liked it ^_^
-charlotte!

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