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Review:Akussa says:
Hello,

I liked this chapter as well I must say. It is so great to see how everybody have their idea on the Sorting of those kids. I particularly liked the letter Rose wrote to her Dad; in this letter I found the same emotion and feeling as you had during the first couple of paragraphs in the first chapter (the ones I liked so much).
The idea that their are so many kids with the Trio's names is hilarious; excellent work!
Other thing I loved : the Sorting Hat putting James back on his place! Brilliantly written!

I found it a bit strange that we heard what the hat was telling the students. I found this part a bit strange; did you mean it like everyone in the crowd heard it too? I re-read that part a couple times and the part where you say : " I listened carefully to what the hat had to say" was confusing in that sense.

Other than that, I think the characterization could still benefit from a bit more emotion and soul but the some characters (Rose and Scorpius mostly) are coming into their own a little more. I like to see that and hope this will be the case with the others too!
Finally, I feel a bit bad for saying this again, but I really think having a Beta look over your story could help improve it greatly. The spelling errors are distracting at times and with such a good story as yours, you wouldn't want to loose readers because of something that can be easily taken care of.

I hope you do not find my reviews too harsh, I simply wish to help you improve this story; it's already quite good as it is but there are little things you could do to make it even better. I really enjoy it so far and can't wait to read the next chapter!

Akussa

Author's Response: Thank you! As far as the beta goes, I've posted in the boards and haven't had any luck yet :( Very saddening. I'll look over the hat's speaking part to see if I can add a word or two to make the scene a bit clearer. I've always pictured everyone being able to hear the hat during the sorting ceremony. Anyway, thank you for the wonderful reviews :) I'll take this all into account for my editing and writing later on. :) Thanks again,

Anna


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