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Review:hermioneism says:
Well, I love the movie and I like your story up to this point, except for one thing: I get that Draco/Andrew lied to everyone about his parents being dead, but why would he lie to himself? I mean, in the beginning of this story you wrote:

"He laughed aloud as he thought about what his mother would be telling him if she had still been alive. He could almost hear her say something like, “You need to settle down soon. Find a nice wife, have a few children, I won’t be alive forever, you know.” She hadn’t been. She had died not even two weeks after his father had died. He had been killed during a raid on one of Voldemort’s camp sites that the Order had discovered. She had died because that bastard had cursed his own wife."

And now his parents are alive? The inconsistency is a bit frustrating as a reader. You may want to delete that part of Draco's inner musings in Chapter 1, or just have his parents be dead.

Anyway, looking forward to the rest of the story. :)

Author's Response: i totally forgot about that part when i was writing. i thought he only said that they were dead to him! thanks for pointing that out, i will get that fix ed ASAP =]
thanks!!


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