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Review:Storyteller says:
I was looking for a taylor swift fan fic cause I have written 1 myself on 'You Belong with me'.

I ADORE THIS SONG-MINE!

But it only got me to your fic. What kept me there was your almost poetic style of writing, and your likable characters. i agree with your other reviewer that your vunerable characters feel more humane and likable.

All in all, a really good job.

There's one logical error that confused me for a while. Please correct it if and when:

Elle says that she was 7 when her dad left and 'sitting there by the water' occurred on the first anniversary of his leaving. That means Elle is eight, and Lysander is described as:

her eyes falling on the man that was sitting to her left.

She tells him she loves him, and a few months later they move in together! BUT SHE IS EIGHT!

My suggestion? Remove the 'first' from the 'first anniversary'.

Really really good job.

Author's Response: Ah, I'm really happy to hear that you liked the story! Taylor Swift songs are quite easy to write stories to, aren't they? :)

I'm glad you caught that! I didn't notice, honestly, but I'll definitely change that asap! Thank you so much for the lovely review! :)


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