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Review:Toujours Padfoot says:
Hello! Toujours Padfoot from the forums here for your requested review.

You breathed a lot of life into Charity's character. We didn't know much about her, and it was intriguing to see her personality mapped out. I especially like the romance bit with Filius - I've never seen a romantic relationship with Flitwick alluded to in any other fanfics. It was a break from the norm, and I liked it. :)

Alrighty, constructive criticism. I'm not sure if you meant to go a bit AU, but there are some canon discrepancies here that you might want to have a look over. Charity wrote that article for The Daily Prophet in the summer after Harry's 6th year. She was taken away and killed before school started and before Snape was made headmaster. Remember that all of the teachers thought that Snape had killed Dumbledore, and they loathed him. They were very cold to him, and he was cold in return to maintain the guise of a Death Eater. The last time Charity saw Snape after Harry's sixth year ended, it was when she was hanging above the Malfoy's table just before Voldemort killed her. Alecto Carrow was the Muggle Studies teacher since the beginning of what was supposed to be Harry's seventh year. You might want to check the Lexicon for some help on this one, or add an author's note at the beginning of the story stating that you went a bit AU, so that these canon changes are disregarded and don't distract the reader.

Other than that, I did enjoy reading it. I really thought her relationship with Flitwick was sweet. And I admire her passion for defending Muggles and her students. Charity was a very minor character, but she died because of what she believed in. You gave her a lot of depth, and I really felt her frustration for what was going on. :)

~Toujours Padfoot

Author's Response: Yeah, I realized that I screwed up the timeline after I wrote it, but it felt so right. I couldn't bring myself to change it. I've always loved Flitwick's character. He just seems to be a bit neglected. He's not even listed in the character boxes you can select for a story's main character!
I'll have to add an Author's Note until I can sit down and figure out how to make it fit canon without losing the feel. Thanks so much for the helpful review! :)


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