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Review:electricfeel says:
Hi electricfeel here with your requested review :)

This was really fantastic. You've taken a minor character and made your reader pity him whilst explaining the atrocities he's committed. Well done, that's quite an achievement. And I love that Antonin isn't speaking to anyone and describing his feelings, the lack of dialogue only adds to it. You've approached his guilt in a more subtle and realistic way. Following the flow of his thoughts was done well too, slipping from the present to past whilst still keeping it all relevant.

I really loved the imagery of seeing the starving cat and mentioning its bones. I think it really added to the tone of this story and the darkness of Antonin's mind. It was cleverly done and I don't know if it was deliberate. I think you just knew this story so well that the tone and style of it flowed without having to overthink anything like the inclusion of a starved cat raiding through the bins. At least that's what I got from it as I read it, it all seemed so effortless and flowed beautifully.

I'm really glad you requested this, it was really good. I've added it to my favourites :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much for popping by and leaving such an amazing review. =] I tried this bit with dialogue, and then felt that it didn't convey the story's meaning too well - I'm glad you seem to feel the same! And I'm relieved to hear his thoughts flowed well. *whew*

For some reason, I got really excited when that bit about the cat came out - I don't know where it actually did come from, but as soon as it did I was like, "YES." Hehehe! ^^ It definitely came from the tone of the story, I think you're absolutely correct.

Wow, another favourite! You're so sweet. ^^ I'm very glad you enjoyed this story!

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