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Review:LovelyMioneWeasley says:
Dum...dum dum. I knew it! I KNEW IT! I just knew Vivian was going to get into some BIG trouble. And her emotional state in conjunction with the snappish and stand-off attitude just equated to pregnant. That eggo is prego (name the movie!)

But you did an extraordinary job on this chapter, Mist. I loved the opening with the girls because I've missed their sleepovers and talking. Remus and Sirius are amazing and I love them but I need the girl stuff too. Its just a matter of balance and all in a story.

I loved the Sirius/Dollie action! The sweet and smooth actions of Sirius were totally in character and super sweet to read about. I think he was hoping to make up for the break. I did miss the Remus/Dollie actions. Maybe there will be flashbacks... (hint hint ;])

And the Animagus part was pure genius! What a perfect place to include it and make it totally believable. I feel like the next chapters may include their struggle trying to achieve it. This is one detail that is often neglected in the Maraduer universe so well done love bug ^_^

Overall, it was an amazing chapter. I didn't see any typos/grammar issues but I wasn't on much of a hunt to find any. My best suggestion would be the cryptic and somewhat confusing beginning of Remus' section on going to meet the other boys. It was confusing and I had to read several times before it kinda made sense in my head.

I hope there is some Lily/James action/interaction in coming chapters as well as some more tutoring perhaps ^_^

Lindsey xx

Author's Response: Lindsey, you reviewed! Anyone ever told you you're awesome? Coz you are, just in case you didn't already know. ;)

Hehehe, good on you for figuring it out. It is a bit left-field but how could I possibly omit such drama? Oh oh oh! Answer: Juno!!! Took me less than a minute to think of the answer, go me xD.

The blame lies entirely with me. Like Dollie, I have been snubbing the girls as of late which isn't good at all. After all, they do represent a significant part of Dollie's life. Thus, with the preggo debacle, the girls will feature much more into the story.

Haha! I can't seem to go one chapter without something romantic happening. What can I say, this is a love story after all. But I am beyond relieved that you thought he was in character. Somehow, it occured to me I'm being way too kind with his character. I'm still thinking of ways to remedy that though *evil grin*. I'll see what I can do about the flashbacks, only if the plot bunnies decide to visit me ;).

I'm so happy you thought so! Truthfully, I'd completely forgot about the animagus thing myself and originally wasn't going to include it. Then recently, I read somewhere that they became animagus in their fifth year so it hit me that I should cover their journey in achieving that goal. Which was a relief seeing as I was struggling in coming up with decent sideplots. Not sure if you noticed but I edited the earlier chapters so that their animagus nicknames aren't created yet.

Yeah, I didn't like it either. Once I have a better way of wording it, I'll be sure to polish it up. Thank you for the suggestion. :)

I have alot in store for the coming chapters. Believe me, there'll be plenty of action. ;) Thankies for another fab review, Lindsey love!

*hugs back*

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