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Review:Aiedail says:
Hi there! Came across your story through the review thread and I thought I'd stop by :)

Firstly, although I've never heard this song before, I feel like you did a great job at matching the emotions of your main character to the lyrics. Usually I don't really take angst seriously, probably mostly because as a very young writer, most of my ideas of what emotion was ended up in my writing of horrible little angsty pieces. However, I appreciate the genuineness of this piece. I feel that, besides the grammatical missteps, the feelings are believable and the things that Snape chooses to think of are also natural. I've always just sort of skipped over this inevitable scene in my head because I don't like to think of it...Snape still isn't one of my favorite characters even knowing all that he sacrificed. Despite this, your story is still effective at drawing emotions, though I would have believed it a little more if he had sort of paralleled his love for Lily and his love for Dumbledore--after all, that is what it must have taken to kill him, the only person who would take confidence in him after his young, foolish years as a supporter of the Dark side.
All in all though, very nice! :) :)

Author's Response: Thank you for the lovely review.

The main bad points (Grammar and Dumbledore) Have been mentioned to me before. The Grammar, i am awful, I have known this foreve and i need to get a beta soon. :) With Dumbledore, i know i mentioned him breifly but i really couldn't find a way to fit him in with the song.
But thank you, emotional development is something i have trouble with so i'm glad you thought i did well with that :D
The song is very angsty but i just thought it seemed to match what Snape would be going through. I was always curious about writing Snape because he is so complex. Which obviously makes him harder to write :D

Thanks again.


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