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Review:redherring says:
I really enjoyed this, definitely one of the most interesting stories I've read in quite some time. What an absolutely fascinating idea! That summary was just so eye-catching "He was a hero. Now, he was nothing."

It all felt so true, a very realistic take on post-war Harry - of course his life would be changed forever by what he'd done, and the pressure, expectations and media attention would be so huge I wouldn't blame him for wanting to disappear.

Even though this was so short and it wasn't even from his point of view, Harry's character really shone out - after all, in canon he is fairly reserved in his way, not exactly the life and soul of the party, and while I'm not saying he'd crumble under that kind of attention, I'm sure he would be desperate to escape it, because after all, all he's ever really wanted is a normal life.

I love love loved that this was in first person (or sort of was, anyway xD). The sense of detachment from Harry, the idea that this person telling the story was completely unconnected with him and didn't even care that much about him but was simply a little curious - really brilliant. Or have I got this all wrong? Was the 'I' in question Harry after all, Harry having run away and wanting to detach himself from his old life, looking back on it as a spectator rather than the one living it? (I may be overanalysing this - I've just come from an english lit lesson, in my defence :P) Either way, it was a great choice of style and extremely effective.

I do, however, think that you could have gone further with this. I did love this so it does actually pain me to be critical, but I think it's only fair to you that if I think you could improve it then I make suggestions about how to do so, because while this is a great story now, it could be an absolutely brilliant one. I think you could have pushed the idea more - in places it felt sort of like the bare bones of a story, largely purely narrative and explanatory. Because of this it also felt a little rushed. There could have been more detail, in my opinion, more description, more emotional depth. It could have more poignant to see our hero reduced to this, could have had more impact and been more powerful.

Overall though, BRILLIANT story, fascinating idea, and well executed. Great job! :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review. Thanks especially for the criticism- I will go back and look over this story again.

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