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Review:ShelbyBlack says:
Hey hun, it's Shelby here from the forums for your review!

"Dominique let her the sound of her heels echo down the road loudly" The only awkward or criticism I have to be honest was this above statement, in my opinion. I had to read over it a few times, I understood what you meant by the end of it though.*

*"Dominique let the sound of her heels echo down the road loudly" Honestly it's a small flaw, ridiculously small and didn't in any way distract me from reading this at all! :)

Now that I've got the "bad" stuff out of the way I can get on with the good stuff!

This is my.third Next Gen where they are grown up. I'm new to Next Gen but I am seeming to like it a lot more than I expected! And Laurie, you have made another great impression on me! I'm so glad to have the time to read your stuff love, and to help in some way, so thank you for popping by and requesting I read this!

Dominique, is creepy! I got chills reading her, you could feel her attitude and personality so vividly. Your description was simple and subtle yet very effective, I'd just love to get in the head and swim around her thoughts, however shocking they may be! You've created a unique character and I'm already fond of her, I've always had a thing for mysteries and ominous characters!

You said that you were not sure if it were gripping enough! I felt suspense while reading it, I also really loved "Forbidden love normally only occurred in fiction, sneaking around in the night to see one-another, secret stolen glances when no one else would notice and the one fact that it was forbidden." This was a very nice beginning to your story! I could literally picture these little sequences happening inside my head...girl looking longingly at her true, but forbidden love! Tragic yet beautiful, well done hun!

This, I can see, is shaping into a really interesting and terrific story! I am really excited to see where it goes! Let me know when the next chapter is done :)

If you have any questions, advice or anything I'm only a comment/pm away!

Good luck with writing, let blot bunnies flourish your brain and your muse is consistent and just plain amazing! Most importantly, have fun! Oh and did I say...I love your story? Because I do, already!

Lots of love
xox

Author's Response: Eep. Thank you so much.
Your review has brought back my faith, as I was lacking it, with this story.
I'm kean to write the next chapter & have it posted.

Thank you very much hun ;)
Lots of Love xo

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