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Review:LovelyMioneWeasley says:
Mist, I think that this was a really smashing chapter of yours! It had so many goodies in it and I just don't know where to start!!

I guess I could start with the undeniably beautiful chapter images you have in each chapter. Each one is extremely well done by the lovelies over at TDA and really sets the tone for your chapter. They are an extra addition that can really help a chapter!

I loved the opening scene with Sirius and Dollie studying together! It was really amazing to see the descriptions of the lake. I am such a big fan of nature and to see it incoporated into stories always makes me smile. I like when authors take the time to really describe and set the stage of the environments of their story. Settings, I think, are some of the most underrated pieces of stortyelling.

I loved the flashback! There is nothing like an eleven year old James and Sirius! Its so good to see that the mischief started so early. Their friendship explanation is completely believable and so easy to envision. Sirius and James playing dare sounds like the boys I tended to run around with at a young age. We'd take turns trying to see who could be the most daring; this is particularly fitting for a pair of Gryffindors.

Remus's thoughts as to why he liked/loved/had feelings for Dollie were really great to read about. I am always curious as to why certain couples get together. For you to give them support really does a splendid thing for the reader. I could totally understand Remus and his reasoning. Sirius' reasoning was hinted at but more straightforward terms would be lovely as well! In due time, I bet ;).

Your pacing and flow worked really well in this chapter. The flashback seemed to connect the two pieces and worked well as a bridge. You did a good job picking up the conversation between Sirius and Dollie as well as Remus and Dollie. They were all very natural conversations with the awkward and tension that one would expect!

xx,
Lindsey

Author's Response: Aaw, Linds, really? That alone is squeeworthy praise. *hugglesblush*

You said it! The credit entirely belongs to those talented TDA folk. It's an honour to have them pretty-up my story ^_^.

I agree completely although when authors get too wordy with the setting, I tend to skim through it. What can I say, I'm impatient hehehe. I always admired how JKR managed to do it so effortlessly.

A pair of little rascals, those little Gryffindor boys. Too bad we only got a glimpse of them in DH. James is such a bad influence, hehe.

I know exactly what you mean. Especially in real-life, I love hearing how couples meet and how the sparks flew. From the mundane to the extraordinary, I'm generally fascinated by love stories ;). To be honest, I wasn't too sure on how to translate that (why those feelings arose) into words, which is why I made Remus and Sirius' reasonings so vague. To get a guy's perspective, whenever I asked them why they liked a particular girl, they'd always answer, 'because she's different, she's not like other girls', which was what I tried to incorparate here.

Are these thank yous getting tedious yet? ^_^. They aren't for me, coz your reviews are lovely.

*hugs*
Misty

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