*tackles because it is oh-so-fun* I was very excited to go back and reread this because I remembered it fairly well from the first time I read it through. I don't read Maraduers much these days...(mostly cause I usually ball my eyes out. They're all dead!) but I always will make an exception for you. Besides, I already had mad love for this story.
Your friendship scene between the girls makes me miss the slumber party days because me and my closest friends. Discussing boys, painting nails, being generally difficult---oh the the good days. You do a great job of creating what I think is a great friendship. Its very believable and very relateable as well.
I loved the boys' scene. You were always good at keeping everyone, I think, in character. Sirius is secretly serious but outwardly, very hysterical. James is adorable and sweet; Zoom-Zoom really cracks me up every time. Poor Remus is overlooked and slightly lonely but always self-deprecating. It makes me want to huggle poor Remus. And you include Peter, even making him "cute little-brother-type." You were always good at standing out amongst a slew of Maraduer fics.
I really, really loved rereading this chapter. It warmed my heart and slowly gave away what happened on the "walk" without you every having to hash out a play-by-play for the reader. You do an amazing job hunny! Plus, your format, grammar, and syntax is always flawless. You never put up a bad product :).
Author's Response: ZOMG LINDSEY!!!
I just read all the reviews at once and I'm just overwhelmed by your sheer amazingness (as if I needed any reminding). I really don't know how to thank you for doing this but I'll try my best ;). I know what you mean, it IS super depressing. I always held hope that Remus would survive the war. Teddy Lupin is a nice addition but NO substitution ;'( . I'm almost dreading getting to later chapters when I have to incorparate their deaths. I had to rethink the final chapter to keep it canon to DH but believe me, I do have an end in mind ;).
Ah, I know what you mean. Makes me feel old thinking about it though, hehe. Their friendship is alot of fun to write but I noticed I've neglected it in later chapters. Not to worry, the latest chapter (chapter 13) addresses and gets back to it.
Writing the Marauders as a group is always a bit daunting but funny enough, once I get into it, it's like the characters are writing themselves, they're all so distinct. *blush*, you are terribly sweet to say that though I don't know how true it is, hahaha.
And I really, really love this review (and you!). Hehe, truth be told, at the time, I thought the walk was too mundane in itself to write so instead, I wanted to focus on the reprecussions, which were far more interesting. I don't think I did this review justice (which doesn't give me much hope for the other oustanding reviews) but you're brilliant, Linds, thank you so much!