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Review:notreallyblonde44 says:
Hello Eridanus! This is notreallyblonde44, a fellow Slytherin from the forum, just doing a little reviewing :)

Fangirl squeee! I am an avid Dean/Luna shipper. I'm not sure why, but also saw so much potential in their relationship from DH. I was sad that JK killed that thought, but I was more than excited to read this missing moment even if it isn't explicitly shippy/romantic.

For the most part I think you really captured the essences of these characters in such a short amount of time. I think Dean would be realist and I like that he doesn't think Luna is all that sane -you're aren't forcing a connection, but they just have one. It's like real life and not fanfic life! I think this is great. This is only enhanced by the fact that Luna "doesn't think much" about Dean, which was funny to me. I do think she wouldn't be interested in romantic relationships in the same way most people are. Great characterization here!

Some questions/things I caught:
"circumstances had dictated that Luna and Dean would go to the beach on this particular afternoon." -Lol. Circumstances brought to you by a writer? Perhaps?
Not sure I'm sold about Luna disliking goblins...this is probably just a me thing, but are they that icky?
' The Wrackspurts were after you, so you sat down.' -you? The ending seemed off, even though the Wrackspurts were a nice touch, along with the contrast in Dean and Luna's approach to sorrow.

Onto some more praise:
I think that in the short amount of time, you succeeded in capturing their characters in a well-written and perfectly described manner. I think this one-shot was sweet, short and to the point. Nothing overtly romantic and I loved the setting, which would be romantic, except for the fact they are in the midst of war. I totally think this missing moment is plausible and I could only hope that this one-shot has inspired you to write more on Luna/Dean...of course this is just me forcing my love onto you haha. Like I wrote above, the ending seems odd and slightly hurried in comparison to the gradual/almost consistent tide-like pace of the rest of the one-shot. As a whole, this was very nice.

(Random question though: what is TGS?)

Best,
nrb
9/10~

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