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Review:DemetersChild says:
Hello there! DemetersChild here from the forums with your review! Sorry it's taken me so long. I tend to drop off the face of the earth every few months, but I'm back now. :D

Anywho, you asked about flow and if I felt that any more information was needed. So far, I think it's flowing rather well. It isn't rushing through things, the transition from May to December was easy, the subtle hint from Dumbledore about what was about to happen made that transition even better. We didn't have to wonder what he was talking about because we got our answer right away.

As for information, I don't think anything else was needed. Obviously Sirius and Vena had something going on while they were in school and Sirius loved her very much. I think that she loved him too, which is why she didn't want her daughter to look like him because of the pain she would have to go through to see that every day.

The summary makes it obvious that it's about the daughter and not the mother, which is one of the reasons I like this introduction. It explains who Morana is through a different perspective. The reader will probably know more about where Morana came from than the girl knows herself.

I'm looking forward to seeing how she plays a role in Harry's life and who Morana becomes.

Magically Yours,

Dem

Author's Response: What's up, dude? I don't mind the wait; it was worth it.

Thank you. I sometimes have an issue with flow, especially on introduction chapters. I tried to put enough information without just giving the entire story away right off the bat. I'm extremely grateful that you got it and understood the basis of what was going on. There will be a bit more information about Sirius and Vena's relationship later on though.

Thank you so much for this review. Again, definitely worth the short wait!

-Reyes91


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