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Review:GryffinClawTherin_Vicky says:
I think this one is shorter than others, but it covers enough.
I'm glad that you're pretty blunt about the suspicions concerning Scorpius. After all, it's to be expected seeing as Scorpius was the only one to be found with the body. Plus, it moves the story along. I really want to see what Scorpius' reaction is about that suspicion; will he angry, sad, frustrated, or simply confused?
I like how you added in just a tad of Lily's personality. You kinda fixed the issues on her breaking down in the past chapter (I think it was that chapter). You also bring in the question about the whereabouts of James, which brings some of Harry's thoughts as well. So that worked out pretty well.
James' part fit well for this chapter. At first, I couldn't believe how quickly the Gryffindors had known something had happened, but then I remembered that it's Hogwarts. xD Anyways, I like James' frustration. It seems like a good way to go. Not angry, depressed or anything of the sort. Frustration works really well.
Overall, good chapter.(: It was lacking in length a bit, but it was well-written. Can't wait for the next chapter.(:
Victoria(:

Author's Response: I feel like all of these chapters are too short, but it was such an awkward story to cut up because I didn't actually write it chapter by chapter, so I did the best that I could.
And I tried to carry this story as upfront and blunt as possible for the most part, obviously the one who found the body will be the first to be blamed. And I think Lily is more consistent throughout the rest of the story, the last chapter had lapses in it.
And James is my favorite, I think he sort of takes a serious situation and makes it a bit more laid back.
Thanks again for the review!
Megan.


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