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Review:notreallyblonde44 says:
Hello Jenna822! This is notreallyblonde44, a fellow Slytherin, I saw that you wrote on the forums you wrote you had this new fic and I love Sirius/Remus so I had to read it.

I didn't realize he said I'm an Invisible Man aloud because of the italics.

'she leaned over Remus and gave him a quick kiss'-confused me, eeps I thought she kissed Sirius at first. When I finally got it (slow), I laughed. A kiss can be very telling, clearly she doesn't like Remus drinking :P

'It was a short distance to the apartment and soon, they were upstairs in the warmth of their home.' -Only the 3 of them went to the bar? Do they share a place? Poor Sirius, why did he do that to himself? Haha

"I...I thought she'd turn you down," Sirius admitted.' -OMG he didn't just say that! (dies of angst)

No it's over. I knew that was how it was going to end but OhMyGoodness this was brilliant! I've always shipped Sirius/Remus and you have nailed it. Everything was great: the writing, the tension, the suspense, the build-up, and the ending. It all seemed natural and real and I loved it! I assure you I don't gush so easily, but this was awesome! Thank you for sharing this with us at HPFF.

To be more detailed (haha): The old smoking lady was hysterical. I'm not sure if that was your intention, but I was cracking up at everything she said and Sirius' reactions to her. I think you have a great ability to tell a story (using showing more than telling too). Your Dorcas seemed carefully crafted and believable. And your Remus and Sirius were superb! I love how the war was not forgotten and only added to the Drama of romance/lust/slash lovings. I had some questions (above) and the title is insanely long in my honest opinion, but c'est la vie!

Again, awesome!

10/10
Best,
nrb

Author's Response: Hey, thank you for coming and reviewing! :D

Yeah, the italics were required by the challenge. I had to use them. Afterwards they will be removed. :)

Nope, she isn't a fan of the drinking.

Yes, only the 3 went. Sirius said that in the start. They take him on their dates so that he can meet someone too. :)

And yeah, Remus lives with Sirius. He had trouble finding work, that's something JK established in canon. I figure he couldn't afford his own place so he shared a place with Sirius. Seperate rooms though.

He was just being honest. Sirius isn't the type to sugar-coat things. At least in my head he isn't.

Aww thank you! Remus/Sirius is my top shipping so I'm glad that I got it right. I didn't purposely make her funny. You can't really force that stuff, but I did find it a bit amusing myself. I wanted a way to cut through a bit of the tension and angst.

Glad that you liked Dorcas. I've really been working on her character lately. She's growing to be one of my favorite females. :)

I hope I answered the questions. ^^'
Yup, I like crazy long titles. Sometimes I go for long ones, sometimes I make them as short as "I Do". Some are mid-length. I like variety. This story felt like a long-title wanter. Lol.

Thank you so much!! --Jenna


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