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Review:The Captain says:
First of all, I have to say I really enjoyed that you used the word flagons. Completely off topic, and not really relevant to a review, but it made me happy.
Besides eliminating Cho from the equation (Although Katie Bell was technically a year younger than Angelina and Alicia. You're certainly not the first to bump her up a year, and it just seems easier to have all the Chaser girls in the same year.), your story is sticking well to cannon. Of course, the whole point of writing is to be creative, but I think the less cannon stories are, the less believable or the more cliched they are. I love how you've kept the Triwizard Tournament in the story still. I haven't read a story before about the tournament from the point of view of someone on Cedric's side, so this will be interesting.
One thing though, I found the phrasing of something Angelina said a little off "Herbology was never my thing, I barely failed". I don't know if you need the barely here. Normally it's I barely passed. Barely failing isn't really something you'd want to do, so I would think people would just say they failed the class, since it doesn't really matter how badly they failed by, you know?
Your pacing is good so far, as is characterization. Hope this review was what you were looking for!

Author's Response: Your review is exactly what I was looking for! (I know, right? 'Flagons' is just such an awesome word!)

I meant to actually make a mention of that - I realized about three chapters into the story that Katie was younger, but decided to keep what I'd written because, as you said, it's easier.

I agree with you, the wording's a little twisty, but I think my point gets across. =)

Thank you very, very much for your extremely helpful review!


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