If there's really a word that can describe your writing style, I think delicious would be it. Beautiful could work as well, or brilliant, or captivating, or awe-inspiring... but, delicious is really the first word that came to mind after I read this lovely piece of work. Doesn't make sense, I know, and if you're really one of those nit picky people, I think you'll say that it's very inappropriate adjective to describe a person's writing style as well. Oh well. :P Again, this is just delicious.
Flowery words and I usually don't get along, but I adore the flowers you used on this one. Not really subtle, but not overflowing - just the right balance and it is perfect. I'm in love with your style. I'm really amazed that words be used like this. I am fully aware of how powerful words can be, and I am also aware that, in the hands of the right person, words can be more powerful to the point that they almost come alive - you did just that. You are made of awesome and your talent, it's ridiculous. You just made me gush and I try, believe me, I do try NOT to gush when I leave reviews, but you made me break my resolve. That means you are great and if you'll grant me the permission to squee right now, I definitely will. :P
There's just something about human emotions and seasons, no? They're unusually harmonious and I love how you played with that idea here. If done the wrong way, the change in the setting could've been choppy, but your flow, the transition - flawless. This is actually one of those stories that, if made into a podcast, would definitely be a relaxing listen, if I'm making any sense. :P I dunno, I just feel like closing my eyes and just imagining the scenes here while listening to the words as they sing to me. Teehee.
Your characters are lovable. I have special fondness for the guy, who, for the purposes of this review only, I will call... John (Really creative, I know :P). Persistence can take you places and I cheered for him when Roxanne - the playful, sweet girl with a little touch of sadistic tendencies in her - said yes. Way to go, John! You know, I can almost see him, telling this success story to his grandchildren and they'd look up to him, because he didn't give up. All right, enough with the day dreaming. :P
Before I embarrass myself even more with my inane ramblings, I just like to say, just in case it's still not very obvious, that I truly adore this story, so thank you for writing this. I'm sorry if I cannot offer any CC's. I think you don't really need it. You're a very talented writer and I'm really looking forward to reading more of your stuff. I'll see you around! ^_^
Author's Response: Wow - this has completely made my week. I mean... wow. And month. Probably year, too. It's made my decade? Yeah, that sounds about right.
I can't start to thank you enough for all your praise! I'm truly, completely flattered. And speechless. Because really, I don't know how to respond to this. At all. MY speechlessness is also compelling me to speak in fragmented sentences also, it appears.
Thank you! Characters and flow. Gah. Those seem to be my two main weaknesses, actually, so I'm absolutely flattered that you think that they're just fine. Gah. I can't even come up with a coherent response, I'm just so overwhelmed.
Thank you from the deepest, largest part of my heart. You have no idea what this review means to me.