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Review:gingersnape says:
Hello there, gingersnape here with your review!

Before I begin my review, I should probably mention how excited I was to have you request this, as well as how I shall go about my various comment, nitpickings, ego boostings, and noticing of shiny objects. First, I came across this story somehow on the forums and was going to read it, when I sighed and realized I had requests piled up and that I didn't want to get too bogged down. And then I realized that I would get to read this story and not feel guilty about it! So now I'm quite happy, and I really felt like thus chapter lived up to it's expectations. :)

As for formatting, I'll just go through and give you comments in the order that they come up in the story, and then finish with my overall opinion, spelling and grammar, and packing and flow. Now, *grabs cookie and notepad* onwards!

The first thing I noticed was how well set up the introduction was. The first chapter is always the hardest, and I felt like you did a good job of getting readers to k ow who Katherine was, a bit on her beliefs, and also a bit on her personality. The only CC I have on that would be to perhaps add her name in a little earlier, as it could be distracting for some people to wonder who she is until half way through the first chapter. That's not a big thing, but it's the only CC I've got. :)

Ahhh! I loved the reference to the Hobbit, as that is one of my favorite books and I loved how well it brought out not only Scorp's beliefs, but also Katherine's. It was very well done, and it put a smile on my face.

The Scorpius POV was nice because I felt like he came off as very cold in the first section, so knowing that he's not quote as cold as he seems was reassuring and also a bit intriguing.

The ending words of the chapter were great, as I felt like I really needed to read on. The whole last section made be want to read on actually, but the very last sentence was amazing.

Spelling and Grammar: I didn't notice much mire than a few typos and the likes, but it's currently nearly midnight, and my grammar skills aren't as sharp as they normally are, so I apologize if I missed something.

Packing and Flow: Very good for a first chapter. I felt like it wad not rushed, bit not slow enough to loose any readers.

Overall, I see potential oozing out of this story and am excited to see how this goes. I would love to continue reviewing this, of you'd like be to, of course, and whenever the next chapter is up, feel free to post in my thread. No form necessary, as I already have your link.

Good luck with the rest of your story and have a good day!
-ginger

Author's Response: Wow, thanks so much! I really appreciate this review, and, in fact, all reviews I receive. I'm glad that I ended up posting on your thread--it was fate! And of course I'm going to add on to your thread when chapter two is FINALLY validated...grr!

Also, as a side note...my fiance said that your pen name made him incredibly happy, as he imagined Alan Rickman in a red wig. :)

You have a good day, too!


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