I love, love, love Albus so much. He's just so vivid in my mind. It's fantastic to read. This is one of the first bits of writing that I've read in a long, long time that's just played out so well in my head. Everything, the apartment they're sat in and the street they're looking onto and Albus in Starbucks, just fits and I can see it and it's so amazing. Scorpius is fantastic too, and I adored how Albus silenced him for eating loudly; it's my biggest pet peeve so I completely empathised with the poor thing.
If that Bulgarian is Viktor Krum, as I'm inclined to believe he is, you'd best keep Jane away. She'll have a fit. She's found herself a new attractive young man to be the face of him and everything! Fabulous way to integrate him into it, though, if it is indeed him.
You can never quote this to anyone and I'll pray that nobody stalks my reviews but your Albus and Scorpius have made my week. It's not been a good one but this has just cheered me up so much and given me a bit of a fanfiction buzz that I've been missing of late.
And a second set of favourite lines. There were far more than just these three but I'd be here all day:
- the really fatal kind of comfy chair
- Malfoy wasn't effeminate or anything, but sometimes he really, really reminded me of my sister.
- raising his chin like the pampered little pout of a boy he was.
This is a little shorter, just because I don't know what to say or do besides start fangirling and I wouldn't want you to think any less of me! Just know that I completely adore this and I'll be eagerly awaiting the future chapters.
Author's Response: lol, really? It's great to hear that Albus comes off the page so clearly and vividly - he's mostly just a voice in my head, one that I don't "see" physically, perhaps because he is the narrator. Now that's scary, living in a character's mind... :P
I thought about making the Bulgarian Viktor, but I don't know if I will, or if he will ever actually appear so that readers can be sure of it. I like the idea of making him no more than a shadow on the edge of the story, with only the barest hint at his true identity present.
I'm so glad that to hear that the silliness of Albus and Scorpius has made your week. They're fun to come back to and write, though I'll have to be careful that I don't push the humour too far - some plot will be necessary in this story. XD There has to be a point when one or both of them realise that they are partners, like it or not, and that they only have each other as allies. I don't want it to become a serious story, but the humour is likely to change key a little. Eventually.
Haha, those were some of my favourite lines to write for this chapter. :D I couldn't resist the Monty Python reference, and making Malfoy all girly just suits someone with a name like Scorpius. That's so cruel of me, I know. ;)
Thank you again for reading and reviewing, Rachel! It's so wonderful to hear from you! I really appreciate it!