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Review:PenguinsWillReignSupreme says:
My 2010 resolution to myself was read more of Susan's writing and then it was suddenly 2011 and that resolution hadn't even begun to make a mark on coming true. However, there is a reviewing challenge and a flat with no internet and so adding two and two together means, in my mathematically challenged brain, finally reading and reviewing the work of the people I promised myself I would.

I am so, so glad that I did. This opening chapter was wonderfully refreshing, stylistically perfect and funny to boot. It's been a while since I read something even slightly like this and I've realised that I've been missing out on a fair few laughs around the place.

Albus and Scorpius in a non-slashy story is for starters a breath of fresh air. Everything from the summary to the title to the banner caught my eye with this. I wouldn't say I was hooked from the first sentence but definitely by the end of that first paragraph. Anyone who uses the term 'eager beaver' automatically gets a set of very shiny brownie points in my book. Same goes for 'Pretty Boy', actually.

Albus' voice is just amazing. I don't read him very often as a main character but he's got a fabulous strong presence in this story that just kept me going throughout. He had some fantastic lines and the way he interacts with everyone was so natural and clever. I hadn't paid much attention to the banner until later, but I got a very Benedict Cumberbatch's Sherlock-yness from him and had to click back to see whether that was how you'd actually envisaged him or whether it was a figment of my imagination. And by that, I've just realised I definitely don't mean identical to Sherlock, more like him fantasising about being him. Or maybe it was just that scene with the scarf that made me think it. I don't know. Rambling.

Scorpius - I can't wait to read more of him, actually. I don't say that too often but I love the way Albus treats him and thinks of him. They interact together really well and since that's going to be the entire basis of the story, I look forward to see how this relationship develops.

All in all, I thought this was an absolutely amazing first chapter. I completely adore it and I shall fly off to read the second right this very moment. Well, in two or three moments because I just want to list a few of my favourite lines:

- I sharply shut out the last words with the very convenient door.

- It was easier for me to think of him as a boy, especially compared to my overpowering masculinity.

- Scratch that. Coward was his middle name.

And just whilst I remember, the description of the new statue in the Atrium of the Ministry was an absolutely gorgeous touch.

Now, onto chapter two ^_^

Author's Response: Whoa, Rachel! Long review, much? :P Not that I'm complaining, except for the scrolling up and down while trying to respond to everything.

It's great to hear that the first chapter turned out so well. Catching first lines were never my thing, but catchy first paragraphs, well, they have to mean more, right? ;) And it's fun to include all that word play and the insults such as "eager beaver" - Albus is wonderfully sarcastic, a la Sherlock Holmes, of course, but with a more humourous vein. He's been a curious character for me since the epilogue of DH when Rowling oh-so-wonderfully made him ambiguous right from his name down to the potential for a Potter in Slytherin, and although I typically slot Albus into Gryffindor, that potential for another side to him is always there, and I love that. It makes him way more interesting than Harry himself. :P Not to mention the fact that, as an Auror, Albus has to put up with a lot, particularly his father's legacy, and it leads him into a different perspective on the world.

There is so much Sherlock in this that it hurts. lol, I have to watch the series again before writing another chapter, just so that I can recapture the right atmosphere. I love the combination of humour, action, and drama in the new series, and wanted to see what happened when it was applied to the magical world. So I made Albus want to be a Sherlock or a Sam Spade or a Philip Marlowe - any of those guys would do because they all lead more interesting lives than he does. That's the key to Albus - he's a bored kid, waiting for a lucky break.

It's definitely not going to become a slashy romance, though I'll be playing with bromance, the strengthening of their relationship into a partnership, but it will take the whole story to get there. ;)

Thank you, thank you, thank you for this review! I really appreciate that you took the time to read and review this story! ^_^


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