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Review:firefly910 says:
*smiles like mad woman* Finally it has been validated!

I loved it!! Vangoo and Van Padfoot, that made me laugh so much. It's a good job they have their cultured friend Lupin to help them out otherwise James and Sirius would be totally clueless wouldn't they?

I'm glad that you incorporated Snape's worst memory, it gives us a reminder of where we are at year wise and how Lily and James' relationship is as well. Plus it creates good drama.

Poor Lily, being called a mudblood and then having to be angry at the boy she won't admit she's falling in love with. It's a tough life for a fifth year Gryffindor girl. I can't wait to see how they resolve this little argument, although it looks like he's already melted her heart slightly.

I also like the fact you've shown that James is beginning to grow a conscience and think about what he and his friends act like. That part where he says that the vicious circle never stops was brilliant because it shows James is showing signs of growing up and starting to think he shouldn't be acting they way he does.

Overall this chapter was funny, dramatic and insightful. Cannot wait for the next one! :)

Author's Response: Callie, I cannot say how much your encouragement means to me. *hugs*

I think it would have been a crime if I didn't incorporate Snape's worst memory. It's an important moment (although an unhappy one) in Lily and James' relationship.

And yes... James is starting to melt her heart bit by bit. :) I am super excited for the final chapter. James is certainly evolving and that's exactly what my idea was - to show this evolution in both characters and interactions between them.

Thanks again! :)

P.S. Van Padfoot has a certain ring to it, right? I like this nickname. :D


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