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Review:Marzipan says:
This was caw-ray-zeee good! It starts off so beautiful and simple and bright - you've done such a good job of painting Lily and Lorcan's relationship, and the life they share together. They are so adorable together. And then, Lorcan hits us with it - the coffins. Um, creepy. Actually makes sense for Lorcan though - he's Luna's son, and I see a lot of her in him here, although you've still made him his own distinct personality. I can totally see him doing this thinking he's doing something really nice and thoughtful and completely missing out on the social cue that THIS IS CREEPY. Lily's reaction sort of gives me flashbacks to The Shining (have you seen/read it? HERE'S JACK). Not that I really blame her - I know I would not handle this sort of thing well. Dunno if I'd go all axe murderer on the coffins, though. At the end, we are still left with a sort of creepy suspenseful "How is this going to effect their relationship?" type vibe, even though at the very beginning of the story we get our "happy ending" - they do get married, they have kids, they get past this. Very much a fan of how you sort of inverted things like that too. All in all, reallly good. Very jealous of your skillz.

Author's Response: Yes, it does smack a bit of the *bright music in a major key* 'Lalalala, I am Lily, life is super-dooper, here is my beautiful boyfriend Lorcan and - oh.' *music modulates through several minor keys and finally rests on C# major, lots of dissonance, a big gong in the background* and etc.

And, yes, reading this back, someone really ought to shake Lorcan by the shoulders and teach him how the world works.

OOH YES THE SHINING. 'Here's LILY!' Ah, I see it now. At the time, though, I hadn't read it, although I did see the Simpsons spoof of the episode? Perhaps I was subconsciously influenced by it. (Inception~)

Lily's got Ginny's fiery chaser blood in her...that is really the only excuse for the coffin smashing I can come up with ^^

Yeah, for once I did actually intend a happy ending. I know, me and happy endings really don't go. But I thought a huge bloodbath of an ending would kind of ruin the vibes and be a bit OTT. Plus Lorcan is actually a fairly decent guy. Just a bit creepy.

Thank you very much for the review! ;D

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