Report a Review

This service is designed to allow HPFF users to alert the staff about inappropriate reviews.

Review:orderofthephoenix says:
Oh my God, this is such a beautiful story. I love the vivid description and imagery in the first paragraph and I think you portray Lily and James' behaviour perfectly while they are in hiding :)

It's the small things like Lily putting up Halloween decorations that remind her of her muggle life and James making a costume for Harry that gives these characters a third dimension. You really bring them to life.

Some of the sentences run on a bit too long, in my opinion. If you cut them up into shorter sentences, they would have a harder impact on the reader. However, the last line: 'Another flash - a terrible scream, a baby's wail - and the light from the jack o' lantern guttered and was extinguished, a wisp of smoke curling to the open heavens where Harry's nursery had stood intact only moments before.' is hard-hitting and final.

Overall, a brilliant story and I hope your other stories are this good :D

Sophia xx

Author's Response: Thank you SO much for your sweet review. =) I am very honored to hear that you think I brought Lily and James to life - since we never really see them alive in the series, I tried to make them more vivid in this story. I have a very bad habit of using commas where I should use periods! =D I'm trying to fix that, but thank you for your comment about the final line. I hope all my other stories are like this, too - I was quite proud of your story. Reviews like yours make me remember why I do this at all. =)

Your Name:
Reason for this Report:

Examples:
  • The review is offensive.
  • The review is spam or chit-chat (not actually a review).
  • The review was double posted.
  • The review has formatting problems.
Submit Report:  





All stories remain the property of their authors and must not be copied in any form without their consent. This is an unofficial, not for profit site, and is in no way connected with J.K. Rowling, Scholastic Books or Bloomsbury Publishing or Warner Bros. It is not endorsed by any of the aforementioned parties. Rights to characters and their images is neither claimed nor implied. The use of photographs and/or the likeness of any person contained herein does not imply endorsement of any kind. Any depictions were obtained through publically available sources and therefore fall under fair use. Although we may provide links to other websites, we are not responsible for any material at these sites. You acknowledge that you link to these other websites at your own risk. All original administrative content is copyright of the site owner and must not be copied in any form (electronic or otherwise) without the prior consent of the siteowner. ©2000-2012 Fanfictionworld.net

[terms of service] [report abuse] [privacy policy] [site credits]
 
 

navigation

home

search HPFF
read stories
write stories
login/register
get help
site links
forums
podcasts
Terms of Service
Site Rules
contact us

  
 
 

categories & genres

Genre:
- crossover
- drama
- fluff
- general
- horror/dark
- humor
- mystery
- romance
- action/adventure
- angst
- au
- young adult

Popular Pairings:
- harry/ginny
- ron/hermione
- james/lily
- draco/hermione
- more...

Format:
- one-shot
- short story
- novella
- novel
- short story collection
- songfic

  
 
 

quick links

my account
ToS
random story
site rules
help
merchandise


  
 
 

fanfictionworld.net