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Review:DarkLadyofSlytherin says:
Poor Marlene! And what the heck was Remus thinking? That doesn't much sound like Remus, unless of course he is worried about her finding out about his condition. In which case I could see him pushing her away for her safety. Though, someone ought to hit him upside the head, it's the first day back! lol

Aside from a few typos here and there, I didn't see much that really bothered me in terms of grammar and such. Though, sometimes the dialogue seems a bit stiff to me, but since I am atrocious at writing dialogue, I"m not sure I can really comment on how to fix it :(

I'm still looking forward to seeing how Sirius differs from every other Sirius story, and I so hope he doesn't break Emmy's heart, because that would be sad. Course, I don't mind unhappy endings (as you are well aware).

This review is far shorter than I anticipated, and probably because I'm tired from work. But feel free to request again when chapter 3 is up. I'm really enjoying what you have. I wanna know why Remus totally flaked out on Marlene, and I wanna know how Emmy plans on getting the infamous Sirius Black's attention.

Len

Author's Response: ZOMG! I'LL NEVER TELL. BUT, you're on the right track as to why Remus pulled things off with being friends with Marlene. But there MAY be more to it than just that. Muahahaha!

So do I, I hope he doesn't break Emmy's heart too. Oops, did I just blow my cover by saying I didn't know where this story is going?! Kidding, I know where it's going, but it could change at any time as the outline is in my head for the most part. Glad to see you're still liking the story, though. (: Thanks!


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