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Review:Pacific Wizard says:
Hi HPFFAwesome: I've wanted to review many times as I read through your trilogy but I couldn't pinpoint what confused me about your storyline. Now I think I can give you a useful review and summarize my thoughts properly.

First, you have an engaging writing style and an energy that seems to ignite the flow of your story. I stayed with your stories because I liked the energy and the little interesting subplots you introduced us to, such as, Hermione's pregnancy and Ron's new job, their future as a married couple or maybe not, Elisa losing her job and her depression, Harry's irritability and indelicate way he handled that situation.

What had me so confused is that there wasn't much background or character development, especially for Elisa. I mean, who is she? Harry died with Ginny as the last thought in his mind. AU or not, it's hard for many of us to break away from that. Also, while I'm a huge H/G fan, I didn't have a problem with the introduction of a new love for Harry. Other than the fact that she's a blond beauty, I didn't learn anything more about why she captivated Harry's heart over Ginny. However, the way you portray Ginny, (manic depressive, bipolar come to mind), I could see Harry wanting to end the relationship. But, just saying that the relationship wasn't working for me was frustratingly tepid. Especially with their history fighting Voldemort, rescuing Harry from the Dursleys, etc. I guess what I'm trying to say is that it was hard to "like or love" either Harry or Ginny.

Then, Ginny used the Veritaserum and knows the truth. But she blew the doors off the place and terrorized everyone to get what she wanted to know. She also blatantly used someone to get to Harry. Hard to empathize with that person.

Now I'm sitting here without character development on Elisa and two main characters who I don't know anymore in Ginny and Harry.

Then the thought struck me. You're going to expose an elaborate plot to change Harry's and Ginny's personalities, break them apart and have a new love for Harry to keep him imperiused so that he never gets back with Ginny. Why? Because the remaining Deatheaters know that an H/G union would provide a magical bond and leadership for the wizarding world that would thwart the rise of the next evil wizard. When that is discovered, Harry and Ginny become themselves again and defeat the perpetrators and live "happily" ever after. Right? Just kidding...

It's been a fun read and I will stay with it because I believe that you will work your magic and it will end with us still in love with our flawed heroes. Well Done. PW

Author's Response: Hey, thanks for the feedback! Also, it's great that you're able to look past some of the extreme OOC and just enjoy the plot of the story. It really means a lot to me. Yes, I know it can be a bit confusing in places, and I'll keep trying to iron out the kinks. Thanks for reading!

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