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Review:DarkLadyofSlytherin says:
Hey Leslie,

Here with review #1.

First I'd like to say that the style of this piece is different than your other stories, and that's great. Also, I'd like to commend you for actually attempting to write a Marauders story.

I am intrigued to find out how Emmy is gonna capture Sirius's attention. I am certain that will be quite difficult to do. Im not sure if I should feel sorry for her or excited.

Now, as for con-crit, I wish there was more description, especially of the room the girls are in at the end. Plus I feel as though there is so much that could have been added to that scene.

I sort of wish that Sirius wasn't a player though, since almost everyone seems to wrote him that way. It'll be interesting to see how you make him different, which I am looking forward to seeing.

Overall, excellent first chapter!

Author's Response: LEN! squishes. Thanks so much for such a lovely review! And I'm glad you've enjoyed this chapter and I'll work on adding in more description into this story as I continue to writing it. I really do appreciate the feedback, especially the constructive criticism. Thanks! (:

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