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Review:long_live_luna_bellatrix says:
What a sweet Christmas story! I'll admit it, I skipped right over the summary, and so I spent some time trying to figure out if this was Hermione/George or Hermione/Charlie. I was sure it was George, and of course when I found I was wrong I had to go back and re-read the earlier bits. Unsurprisingly, I did find some subtle hints at C/H before the end. So you fooled me. :P You might even want to edit the summary, mentioning both George and Charlie but not mentioning which one is in the pairing. It might raise more readers' curiosity.

On the whole, a lovely read. I liked little Teddy, who was always out of it, and the laughing powder idea in general. It was a sweet wintery fic, and got me in a holiday mood all over again. The mention of Harry acting like Dumbledore, and of Hermione feeling like she almost but not entirely belonged were also good.

In this sentence, it read a little confusingly:
"George had told her that it was enough so anyone wouldn't laugh for too long for it to be funny, but still get a dose for some minutes of laughter even with it being blended into the tea." --> I feel like it was worded oddly, maybe you meant for it too say that it wouldn't last too long to be mean? I couldn't quite tell.

Overall, a delightful story. I really enjoyed it, and it was nice not knowing what the ship would be in the end.

Author's Response: I'm actually happy you mentioned your thoughts about the summary. I was thinking about it a lot, wondering if I should put the C/H in it. In a way I would like to have it as a surprise for the readers, but then on the other hand I was afraid that people wouldn't be so happy about the surprise as it is quite an unusual pairing. And then there's the point that I could perhaps get readers who actually look for that pairing by having it in the summary. But you know now I'm rethinking it again. At least if I mention both George and Charlie in the summary and as characters, the readers can't complain, right? I might change it.

Um yeah that sentence sounds a little long and confusing now that you mention it. I will have to think about how to say it better. This isn't betaed at least yet, so I'm happy about people pointing out things like that.

I'm glad you liked the story! It was a lot of fun to write it too!

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