Forget about the writing, I'm more in love with the fact that Scorpius owns a vintage baby-blue car. I'm pretty sure he's reached the top of my love list without even breaking a sweat.
Swap my James for your Scorpius?
Your writing though, is a superbly close second on that list (followed by James Franco and then the entire cast of Gilmore Girls). It is just so beautiful: especially the opening paragraph. 'The wind whipping around Shell Cottage died at the cusp of summer, stifled by heat. It breathed its last in a lingering sigh and its skeleton toppled over the bluff, where it remained.' That is some quality writing, my friend, some high quality writing. It sets the scene for the entire story, I think and there's definitely a sense of mourning - over the loss of the wind or over the loss of Victoire and Scorpius' relationship.
I like how Scorpius only bought the car to see his father's/grandfather's reaction. It really gives more insight into the character, as well as the comment about how he had once likened her skirts to fairies and queens and that. Actually, I think the latter could be directed at either Teddy or Scorpius (you only use pronouns), and I think it could be Teddy because Victoire looks after him like a mother and I always associate fairies/queens with bedtime stories. Plus Ted and Vic probably spent their childhoods together and Scorpius is far too hot and cool driving in his vintage car to talk about fairies!
Eh, I'm probably completely wrong.
I love, love, love and completely adore you interpretation of Scorpius. That 'I love you'. Classic.
The ending was perfectly sad. Read 'Colour My World' by marinahill and there is a most perfect Ted/Vic about how Victoire looks after Teddy (I'm not giving all the deats) I think you will really enjoy.
Overall: AWESOME STORY. Definitely not too vague or boring. LOVE IT! *Favouriting*
Author's Response: SNERK, I love you already for loving Scorpius based on his car. I never appreciated cars, but I figure if I was going to go midwestern with this mood, I was going all the way.
Oh definitely on the swap. Scorpius is my weakness (forever the brooding bad boy), but adorably-dense-gentleman-puppy James is what I stick by.
Whoa, I beat out James Franco and Gilmore Girls? James Franco is a tad overrated for me, though he's pretty darn cute when his facial hair doesn't ruin it. But Gilmore Girls! My childhood right there.
I had a really good muse whenever I wrote this; the line you quoted is one of the first things I wrote down and I had to build a story around that. That's also why it sets the mood. This is so different (re: descriptive) from what I usually write, so I'm glad you like.
Back to the car, I think I first gave him the car and then I realized, 'Wait, why would Scorpius have a car? He's pureblood.' Then the muse came tromping through field, dropping off the word 'rebel', and the idea was born from that. Once again, my muse was extra happy that day. Maybe it was eating macarons or something.
In my head I was thinking of a Scorpius whispering the words to her, being the romantic charmer he is, telling her what he thinks she misses hearing from Teddy. So it's a bit like both men telling her that in a way. But I am forever amused by your description of Scorpius hot and cool in his vintage car. I am totally imagining sunglasses on him. Ahh those noble bad boys.
I love Marina !I will go check that fic out. This fic is actually not my typical fare though, in that it's kind of sad and about Ted/Vic. I actually almost never read sad things and Ted/Vic (you have seen me capslock at your fluff, and that is generally what I do, and sadly, sad fics do not elicit capslock). Except when they're from authors I know. And I do know Marina! And I have heard of that fic. So I shall put that in my queue.
THANK YOU FOR SUCH AN AWESOME REVIEW :D